correct me and guild me. but
When a writer makes such mistakes in his or her normal writing, then we can't expect much from their work. Granted the not capitalized B may be a simple overlooking, it does indicate that you don't think too much about what you write.
But the major point of this quotation is: "guild". In context, it makes very little sense and is somewhat ridiculous, since you probably meant "guide", not "guild".
But, on to the story itself. I have read about a half of it and I lost interest. The names are distracting, the story and characters (so far) seem kind of shallow with dubious promise and the cliche's further detract from the quality of your writing. Granted that characters and story can't be formed so early, there is little indication of something interesting.
Now, I'm in no way a critic, it's jut an average Joe's opinion. (average Joe, for those who don't know, is a term used when talking about a person who has no special skills/qualities)
Last, but not least:
this gona be uber alsome
We'll judge that for ourselves, thank you.
[size=8]EDIT: non-native English speaker...[/size]
