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Projects & Development => Outpost Novellas => Topic started by: Lord Of Pain on February 01, 2010, 06:15:11 AM

Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: Lord Of Pain on February 01, 2010, 06:15:11 AM
Im so excited as i type this wounderfll nevella.
It takes place on earth and right after the astroid fragents hit right befor the conestoga launches. Takes place on a Deep sea submarine.
Has to do with the story of how two brothers have to live with eachother.
And understanding their obnoxious father with his crudy jokes.
It takes place in the Indian ocean close to mt. everest but still deep enough to survive the impact.

The fact is today i have nearly a page done. This novella will be good!
The first chapter; "Within the chaos" will be perfected soon this week.
I am also going to have my language arts teacher take a look at this peace of art at my school. i hope she gives good criticism.

I wll do my best and im planning as i go.

Your truly -LOP-
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: Sirbomber on February 01, 2010, 06:25:32 AM
This belongs in the Novella section...?
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: Mez on February 01, 2010, 07:46:22 AM
Topic moved.
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: Lord Of Pain on February 01, 2010, 04:11:57 PM
Thanks mez, sorry about that i thought it was 'news' ...

anyways my language arts teacher (plus 2 others) and about 5 other random teachers and about 10 students love my novella.. though i wont be posting anything untill i check with my languagge arts teacher so she can correct me and guild me. but for the most part it's all me



this gona be uber alsome.

Who here is looking forward to it? hmm? i want to know.

im going to post my first chunk tonight within the hour. Just have to make corrections on the exsisting then im posting it.

I hope to see smiles as you read. :) :) :)

The one, the only, The Lord Of Pain®
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: Hidiot on February 02, 2010, 02:24:29 AM
correct me and guild me. but
When a writer makes such mistakes in his or her normal writing, then we can't expect much from their work. Granted the not capitalized B may be a simple overlooking, it does indicate that you don't think too much about what you write.
But the major point of this quotation is: "guild". In context, it makes very little sense and is somewhat ridiculous, since you probably meant "guide", not "guild".

But, on to the story itself. I have read about a half of it and I lost interest. The names are distracting, the story and characters (so far) seem kind of shallow with dubious promise and the cliche's further detract from the quality of your writing. Granted that characters and story can't be formed so early, there is little indication of something interesting.

Now, I'm in no way a critic, it's jut an average Joe's opinion. (average Joe, for those who don't know, is a term used when talking about a person who has no special skills/qualities)

Last, but not least:
this gona be uber alsome
We'll judge that for ourselves, thank you.

[size=8]EDIT: non-native English speaker...[/size]
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: CK9 on February 02, 2010, 09:33:18 AM
Ich muss mit Hidiot übereinstimmen, wenn die Punkte, die er macht, gültig sind.

BTW, you spelled über wrong :P
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: Moley on February 02, 2010, 09:13:55 PM
even though the german word for awsome is oober?

don't speak german, but i think im right on that one...
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: CK9 on February 02, 2010, 09:28:38 PM
über actually translates to "over" (and yes, it's pronounced oo-ber)

awesome is "Überwältigend" or overpowering...if I remember right...heh, you tend to forget when you teach yourself
Title: Im Making Novella!
Post by: Lord Of Pain on February 11, 2010, 06:17:57 PM
i am very sad to finrom yoou all that my novella is going to be posponed untill futher notice; basicly untill im in the mood. This could take awhile (like 2-3 months max) or it could be quick depening on my mood changes. Though i will say this; my LA teacher returned my paper last monday with corrections on it. So when im ready i will referr to it as a guide and correct the above story to more literary standards. Though i have a hunch that this topic might get close to being locked due to low traffic flow; please be pateint for i have more to add (tons in fact).
Again im sorry to delay this novella; though it seems i only right when im in the mood.

-Good luck to the rest of the community :)